| Sebtomato - 27 October 2007 |
| Not startlingly original, but a nice character. Needs editing, especially the avalanche of "said kindly"s etc :) |
| I'm going to have to agree with Nicci and Sayo on the grammatical issues; however, this was a nice read. Good length for a story contest, good sense of mystery and intrigue--and I actually found it refreshing that she didn't regress further than six. There's more to AR than second babyhood, and so many seem to forget that. This was a nice entry, all in all--now, let's see the competition. |
| nice story allthough i wished there would be a bit more after the regression then the usual "and if they didnt die yada yada yada" allthough the spelling and grammar was a little on the downside (im writing a review so i dont give a fuck about MY grammar and spelling ;) |
| Writer Nick - 16 October 2007 |
| Nice story! Work on your English grammar though, especially verbs. |
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