|i personally didnt understand the beggining did he start out as a little kid or what? the description was not very detailed. also, what was the plastic thing in his mouth?|
|Sebtomato - 27 October 2007
|I detect a strong Tainted Sins influence here, but nothing wrong with that. Well paced, fun tricks (subway one was my favorite) and I love the 'image capture' thing, great idea.
Oh, and Best. Title. Ever :)|
|Coodie2 - 27 October 2007
|I enjoyed it ! Hope to see more from shadesoflipstick. My only suggestion would be that the regressions are more detailed... :-)
Good story though !|
|Nice. Not too long, not too short; nice descriptions (though perhaps you could give more to the regression sequences); basically a good entry. I liked the title, too (Seb hit that nail on the head). Keep writing, you're good.|