|Nevermind. ;) Your ideas sound greats, anyways, a second chapter would go well it seem. :]|
|Spectrum_Analyzer - 10 May 2015
|Enjoyed it quite a bit, and I hope you write more! The ending felt a little rushed, but I really liked the general ideas used.|
|Neverlander - 10 May 2015
|It's stories like this that I came for. You've written a thoroughly enjoyable piece that hits all the right notes. Congratulations!|
|skywavesage - 10 May 2015
|Thanks for all the compliments! I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
To Spectrum_Analyzer and Streetspirit: My initial draft was longer and included Julian’s post-AR life in the village and an attempt by a party to rescue him. But I had trouble making that fit in with the overall story arc, so settled on a shorter, simpler version.
To vended: I’m sorry but I don’t quite understand why you feel “AR wasn't the main point of the story”. Would be helpful if you can elaborate on your thoughts - thanks!|
|Streetspirit - 09 May 2015
|This is a nice short story! I am a fan of cultural transformation which is rarely seen in AR. I personally would have liked to see the story fleshed out a little, but that is just my preference.|
|Well written and fresh. It somehow feel like the AR wasn't the main point of the story, though. ^^' It was a good little read anyways. Keep the good work! ;)|