So I ask you... was it worth it ?|
|Simply unreadable. It needs proper punctuation, grammar, and paragraph format.|
|I want to be as kind as you request, but you make it impossible.
What makes you think anyone can read a "story" that has ZERO punctuation?
Do you have a mini-keyboard that has no period, quote marks, commas, etc? This "story" would honestly FAIL if handed in by a 5th grader at school.
An OK concept, absolutely horrendous execution.|
|And no, I'm not being harsh. You should be ashamed of posting this where other authors put actual effort into a story.|
|ok, i wont be that harsh, but in the future, make sure you get someone to proof read it before you post it|
|Im sorry Ibut I dont care. I got a headache after the first two sentences . No wait, there werent any! This is worse than my story that I still need to get around to finishing. Sorry, but its the truth and it needed to be said. Its a hard knock life, so said the red headed step child.|